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It was the first day of school after a long winter break. At Silver Falls High it was always a very bust day, everyone would want to go and find their friends to catch up with one another, find out what everyone did through the break.

In one of the narrow halls stood twenty blue lockers all in a straight row, ten on either side of the wall which were painted a light yellow colour. Standing in front of one of the lockers that were near the center of the row was a young girl. Her name was Remiula. She had beautiful locks of dark brown hair that shimmered in the school lights, crystal blue eyes and very pale skin. She wore a red and black stripped kitty off-the-shoulder top with a black tank-top underneath, a side belt that had a red heart-charm on it with black skinny jeans. She also wore one red shoe and one black shoe.

As she took out a black and red back-pack from her locker she was tapped lightly on the shoulder. Smiling, she turned around to face her bestfriend, Alexis. Alexis had equally gorgeous hair, but a touch lighter then her friends, dark brown eyes and light skin, with a hint of pink in her cheeks. She wore a green tank-top and rainbow arm-warmers with light blue jeans that were torn slightly at the knee and green shoes. They both smiled greatly, then jumped into the air and hugged eachother.

"I missed you so much!" Alexis squealed as she slowly pulled away from their tight hug, placing her hands gently on Remiula's shoulders. She couldn't help but notice that something about her friend was different. The curious teen couldn't quite put her finger on it, but something had changed.

"I missed you too, Lexi." Remiula said, smiling happily into Alexis' eyes. "Did you have a good Christmas? I'm so sorry I had to go away with my family over the holidays... My mom has this thing about spending Christmas in different countries each year... It sucks so bad that we couldn't spend any time together!" She frowned and looked at the floor.

Alexis hugged Remiula tightly. "It's perfectly fine," She giggled. "Don't worry about it, I understand."

"You're so awesome, Lexi. Thank you for being so understanding."

"Hey, what are bestfriends for?" Alexis chuckled and linked arms with Remiula.

They both walked down the hall, with their arms still locked, in almost complete silence. "I'm really happy to be back at school." Remiula whispered after a while, smiling at her bestfriend.

"I am too, Lex. You know why? Because I get to spend time with my best pal!" Remiula cheerfully replied. Alexis smiled and hugged Remiula warmly.

When the bell rang, signaling it was time for class, the girls pulled away from their hug. "See you after class?" Alexis asked, holding Remiula's hand.

"Defiantly!" Remiula smiled and hugged Alexis one last time before waving and walking into her classroom. Alexis smiled to herself and then walked into her own classroom, shutting the door behind her.
Lucky - Chapter 1; First day of school.

Who remembers this story that I never finished? <3 I sure do. xD
I started it like... a year ago. So my spelling, punctuation, Grammar and Vocab have gotten better since then. Thus! I re-wrote it. (:
Tell me what you think, and don't hesitate to critique! c:

Chapter 1 - Here.
Chapter 2 - [link]

Lucky, Remiula and Alexis(c) Me
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Birmapus Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Dusk is completely right! <3 You've improved so much! I loved it ;u; I can't wait to read more! <3
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l3utts Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Hehe, thankyou so much. ;u;
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MidnightTheUmbreon Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Holy shit this was a million times better than both your other versions of it put together. o.o
The amount of detail in this is amazing, just as good as the most featured stories on FIM Fiction!!
I could picture everything so clearly, and damn sis, you pulled this introduction off amazingly well!
Loved it! When will there be more? ;u;
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l3utts Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
;o;.. Y-you really think so? Thankyou so much<3
I can't help but feel like I made some tiny spelling/grammar errors. x-x
Probably tomorrow or later on tonight. ;u; If I can get this computer to stop lagging~<3
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MidnightTheUmbreon Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Of course I think so!
You're welcome sis c:
I didn't see any obvious errors~ You worry too much!
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l3utts Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
;u; <33
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